Brainstorming Proposal Argument

For my proposal argument I decided to write about the use of "performance-enhancing" drugs. Many people are aware of this problem so I will probably focus more on the solutions and necessary actions that should be taken to address the problem. The use of "performance-enhancing" drugs is a growing scandal and problem among professional and collegiate athletes. This problem is hurting many sports and is very dangerous to the players who use these drugs. There have been many cases where players have tested positive for these "performance-enhancing" drugs and something needs to be done to fix this problem. The solutions to "performance-enhancing" drugs being used that I am going to focus on are that they need to be banned in every sport, and every sport needs to test their athletes often. Every sport has different punishments for using these drugs. I am going to talk about how each sport handles the problem and the actions that they are taking to get rid of these drugs. I think that this is a really interesting topic because I am an athlete myself and I really love to watch professional and collegiate games. It really disappoints me that these players are using these drugs and some are getting away with it or getting minor punishments. I think that this is a serious problem because it affects the athletes well-being and the sport they are part of.

The Hardest of the Hardcore

Dylan's paper on the war of Iraq and the function of contractors was interesting to read. I think that his paper was interesting and would have appeal to his audience because of how serious the war in Iraq is and it is greatly affecting our lives every day. Dylan essay is about how mercenaries, ex-military personnel hired by the Pentagon to help the U.S. military, are used during warfare and the problems behind this method. Dylan clearly explains his 6 major reasons why using mercenaries are problematic. Each reason he makes he supports with enough evidence for the reader so that he seems credible and his paper is credible as well. One major problem that he mentioned that caught my eye was the problem of mercenaries not having national loyalties. He used the example of the Persian Gulf War and how mercenaries working at one of the bases fled when they heard that they could be in danger of chemical weapons. This was a strong example and a good point to prove that mercenaries are problematic during war. Overall, I think that Dylan's paper was strong and had a lot of evidence and good points. The only problem that I noticed was his conclusion. I thought his conclusion wasn't strong enough to clearly explain what he proved throughout his paper as well as what should be done. He didn't provide his audience with any solutions. All he said was that Congress and the people of the U.S. need to take action so this doesn't happen. He doesn't explain if his conclusion is that mercenaries should be eliminated all together or if Congress should take action so the abuse of power and lawlessness does not occur. I think that he should have given possible solutions to this problem so the audience has an idea of what should be done.